The graph below shows the percentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates changes in Australian exports to four different countries between 1990 and 2012. Overall, while Japan was the main importer of Australia for a long period, China’s exports grew significantly and became the largest figure.
In 1990, Japan was the dominant figure with 25% of Australia’s exports. This figure experienced steady decline over the 15-year’ period, which accounted for only about 17% in 2012. As for China’s imports, it started with the lowest percentages, steadily increasing to the top. By the end of the period, China had overtaken Japan with just over 27%, being the highest figure on the chart.
Until 2000, the US imports, with some fluctuations, remained close at 10%, dropping to 5% and showing a slight increase to about 6%. India started with merely 3% of exports, which showed a small rise to 7%. However, this peak wasn’t maintained, and India’s exports declined to 5% by the end of the period, the lowest among the four countries.
The essay is generally well-organized and ideas are logically sequenced. However, there could be more explicit connections between ideas to enhance cohesion.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main ideas, though some phrases could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with few errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the graph and makes relevant comparisons. However, some details could be more explicitly stated.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for clarity.
- Ensure all trends are clearly described.