The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian exports to Japan, the US, China, and India from 1990 to 2012. Overall, while the percentage of exports to China and India increased, the opposite trend was observed for Japan and the US over the period shown. It is also worth noting that Japan had the highest percentage of exports, whereas India accounted for the lowest percentage at the beginning of the period.
China and India exhibited consistently increase among figures. Despite the fact that Australia exported the least to China and India in 1990, there was observed increasing to 2012. It is noticed slightly rise of transporting products to China and India to 2005. By 2010, India showed an increase (over 8%), followed by a decrease to 5% by 2012. Also by 2010 , China demonstrated sharply increasing (15%), over the 2 years it reached the peak (28%).
Japan accounted 25% in 1990, which slightly fell down to 15% in 2000, marking the all-time lowest point between 2000 and 2005. By 2010 it had increased slightly (20%) surprisingly, but by 2012 it again had dropped to 18%. US made up over 12% in 1990 – a second largest importer of the time. There was a slight drop in 1995 (to 7%), but by 2000 it had returned to its previous state, but it didn’t matter because by 2012 it had fallen to 6%.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data, making appropriate comparisons where necessary. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more comparisons between the different countries.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more comparisons between the different countries. This will help to provide a more comprehensive and nuanced understanding of the data.