The graph below shows the percentage of female students on four different courses at one university from 1970 to 2015.
The given graph below provides information about the amount of woman educators on four various courses at one particular university between 1970 and 2015.
Overall, as is presented in the graph, three types of course had been increased over the years such as physics, medicine and law. To contrast this, computer sciense had been risen slowly a bit and decreased by 1990.
It is clear that law education among female students was a dominant among rest of the courses. They had been dramatically risen by f1970 with the percentage of 10. They reached approximately 90% in 2000. Up to 2005, they remained the same steady,90%, later by 2010 it was slowly fallen.
In 1970, computer science and physics learners started to rise nearly with the same amount 30%, by 1990 they witnessed an alteration 70% and 60% , respectively. The physics continued to increase during the given perios of time, but contrast computer science learners drastically was diminished by 2015.}
It is also clear that students who were interested in medicine began to improve with the percentage of 19 and they reached 80% by 2015.
The essay provides a basic overview of the data but lacks clear organization and logical flow. Some sentences are confusing due to unclear references and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
- Ensure logical flow by using appropriate linking words.
- Clarify comparisons between courses.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some errors in word choice and spelling.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including issues with tense consistency and sentence structure.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and accurate data representation. Some information is incorrect or unclear.
Suggestions
- Provide more accurate data representation.
- Include detailed comparisons between courses.
- Ensure all information is clear and accurate.