The graph below shows the percentage of workers in different European countries with a day or more illness absence from 1991 to 2001.
The line chart illustrates the proportion of employees taking one or more sick leaves in five different countries of Europe between 1991 and 2001.
Overall, it is noticeable that Netherlands had the highest figure for illness absentees throughout the priod, except for the first year. The share of Swedish workers taking a day or days off because of illness decreased, while the oppposite is true for that of French workers. Germany showed no change in this trend.
Focusing on Sweden and France, the former had 5% and the latter 3% of absenteeism due to ilness at work at the beginning of the period. By 1996, however, around 3.1% of workers had called off work in both of these countries. In 2001, the reverse proportions of the first year can be seen.
As for the rest of the countries, Germany and Netherlands started with around 1.5% and 5% respectively in the initial year. Having increased by a percent the following year, the proportion of sick leaves in Netherlands fell dramatically to about 4.5%. In the final year, due to a consistent growth, 6% of the Netherlands asked for a sick leave.
The essay generally follows a logical structure, but there are some inconsistencies and unclear transitions.
Suggestions
- Ensure consistent use of country names.
- Clarify the trends for all countries.
- Improve transitions between paragraphs.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some inaccuracies.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and lacks complexity in sentence structures.
The essay covers the main trends but lacks detailed coverage of all countries.
Suggestions
- Include data for all countries.
- Provide more specific data points.
- Ensure all trends are accurately described.