The graph below shows the percentages of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three countries
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 and above in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.
Overall, the proportion of elderly people increased in all three countries over the given period, with Japan experiencing the most dramatic growth towards the end of the peroid. Sweden and the USA showed more gradual and steady changes.
In 1940, the USA had the highest proportion of elderly people at 9%, followed by Sweden at around 7%, while Japan had the lowest at 5%. The percentage of elderly residents in the USA rose steadily, reaching 15% by 1980 and remaining constant until the 2000s. However, it is projected to climb to about 23% by 2040. Sweden saw a steady rise, the USA in the 1990s and reaching around 20% by 2000. It is expected to peak at about 25% in 2040, showing significant growth in comparison to its earlier years. Japan had a much smaller elderly population early, with its proportion even decreasing slightly until the 1960s. By 2040, Japan is projected to have the highest proportion of people aged 65 and over, reaching nearly 27%.
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