The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon
The line graph presents data on the changes in the number of people living in three counties of Oregon from 1940 to 2004.
In general, there was an upward trend in the figures for Columbia, Yamhill and Washington but Washington’s growth of population was much more significant than that of Columbia and Yamhill throughout the period.
Turning to details, in 1940, Columbia and Yamhill had a population of approximately 30,000 people which made them the least populated places. By contrast, in Washington, the most populous county, 75,000 people lived. By 1970, this figure had risen to just over 120,000, whilst the number of residents in Yamhill and Columbia saw a gradual increase of 45,000 and about 30,000 respectively.
Similar trends continued until 2000, Washington’s drastic increase resulted in a high of well over 240,000. In the meantime, the respective figures for Yamhill and Columbia were 90,000 and 75,000.
The essay is logically organized and effectively uses linking words to show relationships between information.
Suggestions
- Ensure consistency in data reporting.
- Use more varied linking phrases.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary accurately, though there could be more variety.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing key trends and data, though there are minor inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data points match the graph.
- Clarify comparisons between counties.