the graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 200
The line graph compares how much fuel—petroleum, natural gas, and coal—was produced in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall, the production of petroleum and natural gas saw an upward trend during the given years, albeit to varying degrees, while the reverse was true for coal. It is also worth noting that petroleum was the most produced fuel, with coal recording the lowest production level by the end of the period.
Examining the increases first, petroleum and natural gas were produced about 90 and 40 energy units in 1981, respectively. Over the ensuing 5 years, the amount of petroleum increased to 140 energy units, with the latter leveling off in that period. Petroleum, despite seeing a sharp decrease between 1986 and 1991, skyrocketed to a chart high of just above 140 in the next 9 years, whereas natural gas followed a similar trend, finishing at 100.
The remaining figure, coal, bucked the foregoing trend. In 1981, the UK produced 80 energy units of coal, after which its figure had fluctuated by 1986 between 80 and 60. Subsequently, the production of coal declined, ending the chart with just below 40 energy units.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the main trends. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the description of the graph. However, there are a few areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to make the relationships between ideas clearer.
- Consider using more topic sentences to introduce new ideas and guide the reader through the essay.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved for greater clarity.
The essay provides a clear overview of the main trends and presents detailed information about the production levels of each type of fuel. The information is accurately described and the essay effectively compares the trends in the production of petroleum, natural gas, and coal.
Suggestions
- Make sure to fully address all parts of the task. The essay does a good job of comparing the trends in the production of different types of fuel, but it could provide more detailed analysis of the reasons for the trends and their potential impacts.