The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995, and 2015.
The bar graph compares the proportion of 5 types of magazines sold in the years 1975, 1995, and 2015.
Overall, except for sports magazines, which counted as the largest figure and experienced a dramatic increase, while other types mostly decreased or remained stable.
Sports magazines showed an upward trajectory, becoming the highest in all three years. In 1975, approximately 33% of magazine purchases were related to sports, this number then climbed to just over 35%, peaking at nearly 42% in the final year. In contrast, other unspecified magazines, in 1975, were around 26%, which then increased significantly to the same percentages as sports magazines in the first year, and in 2015 the figure stabilized to its former position (26%).
On the other hand, Health magazines started at just over 25%, dropped to 20% in 1995, and remained unstable until 2015. However, fashion magazines declined significantly from around 22% to just over 15% and ended the period with the lowest percentage of sales (5%). Finally, magazines related to food showed similar trajectories as other types of magazines but with disparity, where the figure increased dramatically from 10% to nearly 22% and returned to its previous position.
The essay generally follows a logical structure, but there are issues with clarity and flow.
Suggestions
- Improve sentence transitions.
- Clarify the comparison between magazine types.
- Ensure consistent use of data.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are imprecise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay addresses the task, providing a summary of the data, but lacks precision in some areas.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data is accurately represented.
- Clarify comparisons between different magazine types.