The graph illustrates data about the number of international students who studied at a UK university between 1995 and 2015.
The graph illustrates data about the number of international students who studied at a UK university between 1995 and 2015.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were significant upward trends in both Asia and North America, while the trends for Africa and Europe stayed unchanged despite small changes over a period spanning from 1995 and 2015. Another interesting point is that Asia was predominant throughout the whole period.
Looking at the details, as regards Asia, it started the period at 60 in 1995. At this point, the figure soared, finishing at 120 in 2015 – marking a two-fold increase. Having remained almost unchanged by 2010, it then rose sharply in the last five years, reaching 70 in 2015.
By contrast, there were almost no changes in the number of students from Africa and Europe. Despite small fluctuations, they figures remained at 20 for Africa and 50 for Europe, which were the same with their initial numbers.
The essay presents information in a logical manner with some clear progression. However, there are inconsistencies in how different regions are discussed, and some sentences could be better linked.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure consistency in discussing all regions.
- Clarify points with better transitions.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some words and phrases are repeated, and there are minor errors.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which affects clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks some details and contains inaccuracies in data interpretation.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data points are accurately represented.
- Include more specific details for each region.