The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.

The pie chart presents information about production of passenger cars in 2015. Overall, China and Europe produced half of the cars worldwide whereas Japan/Korea were second and third biggest manufacturers respectively in 2015.
Looking at the graph in more detail, it is evident that China’s car production made up 26% of the overall production, which was followed by Europe with 25% of overall production.
In contrast, 19% of cars worldwide were made in North America while Japan/Korea manufactured 16% of passenger vehicles worldwide.
Turning to smaller manufacturers, South Asia’s car production made up 8% of all passenger vehicles while 4% of cars belonged to South America. In comparison, Middle East and Africa produced the smallest proportion of cars worldwide with just 2%.

8.0

The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the main trends observed in the graph. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow, and there is good use of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs.

Suggestions

Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.

The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.

The essay demonstrates a good control of a range of grammatical structures. There are a few minor errors, but these do not impede communication.

The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data presented in the graph. The writer has addressed all the main points and provided a clear overview of the information.