The graph shows information about the number of people in Australia who use Chinese, Arabic, Italian and Greek as their first language.
The line graph provides data on the number of people residing in Australia, who used four different languages – Chinese, Arabic, Italian and Greek – as their first language for 15-year period, spanning form 1986 to 2011.
Overall, it is evident that the number of individuals in Australia, who used Chinese and Arabic as their mother tongue significantly increased over the given period, whereas the opposite trend can be witnessed in the number of people who used the other two languages as their first language.
In 1986, the most common foreign language that was used as the first language in Australia was Greek, which made up around 230,000 users. Italian was ranked second with roughly 150,000 native Italian people, which was followed by Chinese – the language that was to get popular in the following years – with slightly more than 100,000 people. Arabic language was the least commonly used language at that time.
After five years, by 1991, figures had already started to change notably, with two European language users – Greek and Italian – going down in number, while other two languages went up, with Chinese language becoming the second most common foreign language in Australia.
The number of Greek and Italian users continued to decline, in an identical pace, until the end of the period (2011); however, the number of people who spoke Italian as their first language remained static in the last 5 years from 2006 to 2011, with only around 100,000 people, while this figure in Greek users was higher, around 185,000 people.
The popularity of Chinese language skyrocketed by the year 2011, with roughly 350,000 native users in Australia. Arabic language users, on the other hand, despite having the same trend, the number increased moderately, going up only by 100,000.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the trends. However, some sentences could be connected more smoothly to improve flow.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
- Avoid repetition of phrases for better clarity.
- Ensure all parts of the essay are balanced.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic. Some repetition of words and phrases is present.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant data from the graph. It provides an overview and specific details, though some data could be more precisely described.
Suggestions
- Include more precise data from the graph.
- Ensure all trends are clearly described.