The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
The line graph compares 4 degrees of education, namely no school certificate, high school, bachelor’s degree, and master’s degree, in terms of what proportion of occupation has changed in the UK, over a 35-year period, started from 1990.
Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of altering jobs in all the education level started from 0%. However, working with a bachelor’s degree has experienced significant growth. The portion of having a job without a school certificate and with a high school certificate has shown slowly decreasing, and working with a bachelor’s degree has falctuated over the given period.
Turning to details, the index of hiring people who had master’s degree increased slowly from 1990 to 2005, and during the next 5 years, this employment sored from 10% to 20%. Then, the figure went up gradually until 2024, and a similar result is expected in 2025. The number of people with bachelor’s degree showed slow climbing in the first 5 years, and this fluctuated over a 24-year period, and this will continue to increase in 2025.
People without school certificate were downtrend, and this went down from 1990 to 2020. Then it remained stable in the next 4 years, and it is expected that it will not change in 2025. People who got high school certificate were also downtrend, and it represented sharp declining during the given period.
Employment of people with a bachelor’s and master’s degrees showed an increase at the end of the line compared to 1990, while employment of people with a high school degree and even no school certificate showed a decrease.
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