The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
TASK 1 THE GRAPH PROVIDES INFORMATION ABOUT HOW THE PERCENTAGE OF EMPLOYMENT IN THE UK HAS CHANGED BETWEEN 1990 AND 2025, BASED ON FOUR EDUCATIONAL LEVELS.
OVERALL, THE EMPLOYMENT PROPORTION FOR PEOPLE WITH BACHELOR’S AND MASTER’S DEGREES INCREASE STEADILY THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD, WHILE THE RATES FOR THOSE WITH NO SCHOOL CERTIFICATE AND HIGH SCHOOL EDUCATION DECLINE CONSISTENTLY.
THE PERCENTAGE OF PEOPLE WITH A BACHELOR’S OR MASTER’S DEGREE IN EMPLOYMENT INCREASES STRONGLY AFTER 2005. FROM THIS POINT, THE EMPLOYMENT RATE FOR BACHELOR’S DEGREE HOLDERS RISES SHARPLY, WHILE THE RATE FOR MASTER’S DEGREE HOLDERS GROWS STEADILY. BEFORE 2005 THE EMPLOYMENT RATE FOR BACHELOR’S DEGREES FLUCTUATES SLIGHTLY BUT THEN CONTINUES TO GROW CONSISTENTLY UNTIL 2025.
ON THE OTHER HAND, THE PERCENTAGE OF PEOPLE WITH NO SCHOOL CERTIFICATE OR ONLY A HIGH SCHOOL EDUCATION DECREASES OVER TIME. FOR THOSE WITHOUT A SCHOOL CERTIFICATE, THE DECLINE IS STEADY AND SMOOTH. SIMILARLY, THE EMPLOYMENT RATE FOR HIGH SCHOOL GRADUATES FALLS CONTINUOUSLY, ESPECIALLY AFTER 2005, AND THIS TREND IS EXPECTED TO CONTINUE UNTIL 2025.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to provide a more detailed analysis.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the information presented in the graph. The writer makes appropriate comparisons and trends are identified and explained well. However, the writer could provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including the reasons for the trends and their potential impact.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including the reasons for the trends and their potential impact.