The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
The line graph illustrates actual and projected percentage in change employement in the UK between 1990 and 2025. It is based on four levels of education: no school certificate, high school certificate, bachelor’s degree and master’s degree.
Overall, the graph shows that employments with bachelor’s and master’s degree go up, while rate for workers with no school certificate and high school certificates are dropped over years.
From 1990 to 2025 employements with master’s degree and bachelor’s degree rose up and remain stability. It is expected grow until 2025. However, percentage for workers with no school certificate started drop after 2000 and dropped sharply from 2010 to 2025. A similar tthing for employement percentage with high school certificate began to decline in 2010.
The essay presents the information in a generally clear manner but lacks coherence in parts. The structure could be improved with better paragraphing and clearer linkage between ideas.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Clarify the sequence of events.
The essay uses basic vocabulary with some repetition. There is limited use of advanced or varied vocabulary.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, affecting clarity. The range of grammatical structures is limited.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and specific data references. It provides a general overview without sufficient depth.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the graph to support points.
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the education levels.
- Ensure all key trends are covered.