The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
The line graph compares the current and predicted proportion change in employment in one country based on the level of education.
Overall, while master’s degree and bachalor’s degree experienced, with fluctuations and rose sharply although high school and no school certificate faced with rapid decline. In 1990 all different employment education level started at 0 %.
Moreover every decade master’s degree and bachalor’s degree, experienced with fluctuations and climbed sharply and it was around 10% for both degrees. While master’s degree demostrated rose sharply in 2005 to 2015 it was at 20 %,,bachalor’s degree was no change over the years and remained at 10 percent. Finally master’s degree increased to 30 % in 2025.
In 1990 to 2025 No school certificate and high school education level, faced with dropping steadily. In 2020 proprosion of no school certificate dropped for -10%, However High school decreased by only -3 %. Finally two various education levels remained in 2025 in last place than other degree.
The essay lacks clear organization and has issues with logical flow. There is a lack of clarity in the comparisons and trends described.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphs for each education level.
- Ensure logical flow by linking sentences effectively.
- Use appropriate connectors to compare and contrast data.
The essay uses basic vocabulary with some errors in word choice and spelling.
The essay has frequent grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay partially addresses the task but lacks clear description of key trends and comparisons.
Suggestions
- Clearly describe the trends for each education level.
- Provide specific data points to support descriptions.
- Ensure all key features of the graph are covered.