The graph shows the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
The bar chart illustrates how much time three kinds of educators taught in four various schools of four countries in 2001.
Overall, it is evident that upper secondary teachers worked the highest number of hours in each school, and the USA’s school taught more in all three stages of education.
Focusing on Japan and Spain first, 600 and 650 hours were allocated by a primary-level teacher, respectively. Lower secondary teachers in Japan spared around 650 hours for teaching, which is almost 100 hors fewer than in Spain. When it comes to the key feature, 900 hours of learning was done by Spanish upper secondary pupils, and just 700 hours by the Japanese.
As for the Iceland, and the USA, the the number of hours spent in teaching primary and lower secondary schools in the former was aproximately 600 hours. Upper secondary classes though took 900 hours of teacer’s time. When it comes to American education, the primary and lower secondary teachers spent 750 and 1000 hourse respectively, and the amount of time spared by upper secondary teachers equalled 50 days.
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks smooth transitions between ideas. Some details are not clearly connected.
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- Use linking words to connect ideas more clearly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
- Avoid repetition and redundancy.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some words are used incorrectly or repetitively.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, affecting clarity and precision.
The essay addresses the task but lacks some clarity and precision in presenting data.
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- Ensure accurate data presentation.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
- Provide a clear overview of the main trends.