The graph shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985–2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates how many male and female students atttends at university between 1985 and 2015
Overall, the number of male and female students increased steadily untill 2010 years. However, after that number of male students had significant increase, while number of female students had significant decline
Number of male students was 5,000 in 1985 year. But in 2015, it has reached to 40.000 male students. It has gone up steadily untill 2010 years. In 2010 years, it has increased sharply.
The number of female students was zero in 1985 years. However, in 2010 years it has grown to approximately 33,000 female students as male students reached that number in 2010 years. But after that,number of female students had decreased sharply and gone down to 29,000 students in 2015 years
The essay presents information in a somewhat logical sequence but lacks clear paragraphing and smooth transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Improve transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
- Summarize the main trends clearly.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including tense and subject-verb agreement issues.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and comparison of the data.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between male and female student trends.
- Include specific data points to support descriptions.
- Summarize key trends more effectively.