The graph shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985–2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts a difference between two genders studying IT at university between 1985 and 2015. Both genders education level was increasing well.
In 1985, number of men who were being taught IT was 5000, however, women’s number was less than 1000. Starting with this year, both gender’s number started souring and by 1995 both men and women’s numbers reached more than 10000 students. Than, passing several years after 1995 both genders encountered and reached a same number of students. Male and female’s numbers studying IT were rising in a same level until 2010 when women students’ number started increasing declining, nevertheless, men continued they progress reaching 40000 by 2015.
Overall, both male and female students were similar and multiplied as well, until women’s numbers started declining and men overtook them by 2015.
The essay lacks clear logical progression and contains some awkward transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between points.
- Ensure logical progression of ideas.
- Summarize key points effectively.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and minor errors.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific data points from the graph.
- Ensure accuracy in describing trends.
- Include a more detailed overview.