The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon
The line graph compares how the the number of citizens of three various counties in Oregon saw changes at the end of the 19th century from 1940 to 2000.
It is obvious that Columbia,Yamhill, Washington saw marked rises in their population, with Washington being the most populated of all throughout the period.
In 1940, Yamhill and Columbia were homes for approximately 30 thousand people which must have been the least popular choices for living. However, these identical figures grew steadily peaking at 90 and 75 thousand respectively at the end of the period.
The county Washington started at 75 thousand, which was the final figure of neighbouring county Columbia. A figure which then experienced a drastic increase in the number of residents reaching a high of nearly 255 thousand and remaining its dominance in the population rate.
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The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
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