The graphs below compare the water levels of six cities in Australia during October 2009 and October 2010.
Water levels in reservoirs (% of maximum)
120
100
80
60
Percentage
40
20
0
Darwin
Sydney
Melbourne
Brisbane
Perth
Canberra
Oct 2009
Oct 2010
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the graphs. However, the use of symbols instead of words may affect the readability and understanding of the essay. The data for each city is presented in a logical order, but there is no explicit connection or transition between the individual city analyses.
Suggestions
- Use words to describe the data and make sure to create clear transitions between the city analyses.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some appropriate academic words. However, the use of symbols instead of words is not suitable for an IELTS essay. There are also a few instances where word choice could be improved for better clarity.
The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, the use of symbols instead of words may affect the readability of the essay.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the graphs. However, the use of symbols instead of words may affect the readability and understanding of the essay. The essay could be improved by providing more detailed comparisons and trends.
Suggestions
- Describe the main trends and comparisons between the cities. Discuss any significant changes or patterns in the water levels over the given period.