The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in acountry. Summirize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graphs show the overall proportion of released movies and tickets that sold between 1996 and 2006 in one particular country.
Overall, the shares of films in drama and comedy majors highlighted the top position as well as selling most of their tickets compared to other with small figure.
In 1996 and 2006 starting from about 25% the proportion of movies in drama peaked to 35%. While the figure in comedy and fantasy displayed 20% and just above 10% in 1996, then increased to 25% and about 15% respectively. In compare the figure I romance major stood equally between the years
The tickets which sold in comedy and drama were much higher compared to other two. The shares of tickets in drama and comedy showed just above 15% and 20% in the first year then increased to about 17% for the first one and about reaching to 25% for the second one. With much small rate there was almost 5% differ in fantasy, showing an increase to 7% in 2006 with 2% differ in romance.
The essay lacks clear organization and has some confusing parts. The comparison between the years is not effectively structured, leading to a lack of clarity.
Suggestions
- Organize the data by category and year for clarity.
- Use linking words to connect ideas better.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.
The vocabulary is basic and lacks variety. Some word choices are incorrect or awkward.
There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and clear comparisons. Some information is inaccurate or unclear.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the years.
- Ensure all data from the graphs is accurately described.
- Focus on clarity and accuracy in reporting figures.