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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in acountry. Summirize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graphs give information about the total proportion of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Overall, while the percentage of film released. Drama was dramatically rose. Moreover, comedy was a considerably increased ticket sales. Fantasy and Romance were a slightly declined.
It is clear that sales of tickets for people sow drama was a considerably rose 15% in 1996 year and this was followed by a gradually increased 17% in 2006 year. After which people sow comedy was a dramatically peak 20% in 1996 year and this followed by an enormously increased 23% in 2006 years.
However, fantasy ticket sales was a slightly reduce 3% in 1996 while it saw a minimally rose 6% in 2006 Romance ticket sales was a gradually decreased 5% in 1996 despite dropped significantly 1% in 2006 year.
In contrast the percentage of film released. Drama increased dramatically in 1996 ,reaching 25%. Starting at 35% a sharply rose in 2006 year comedy was growing 20% in 1996 year and this was followed by a moderately rose 25% in 2006 year Romance was sharply declined 5% in 1996 until 2006 years. Fantasy was a noticeably grow 10% in 1996 year after which it improved ticket sales 15% in 2006 year.

4.5

The essay lacks clear organization and logical flow. There are abrupt transitions and some sentences are difficult to follow.

Suggestions
  • Use clear paragraphing to separate different points.
  • Ensure logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.
  • Use linking words to improve transitions.

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with incorrect word choices.

The essay contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.

The essay attempts to summarize and compare the data but lacks clarity and accuracy in reporting.

Suggestions
  • Provide a clearer summary of the main features.
  • Make accurate comparisons between the years.
  • Ensure all data is correctly reported.