The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001.
The pie charts show how British people’s spending habits changed from 1971 to 2001, focusing on 6 consumer goods and services.
Overall, the proportion of expenditure on some goods and services – computers, restaurants, and cars – increased, while others, including books, furniture, petrol, and food, experienced a downward trend. As a result, food, the largest source of spending initially, was replaced by cars.
In 1971, spending on cars was 22%, but this increased during the next 30 years, making up 43% of the total expenditure. Similarly, the share of computers as an expenditure source grew from 2 percentage points in 1971 to 12% in 2001. That year, 14% of spending went to restaurants, which was twice as much as that of 1971.
The other areas of expenditure shrank over the years. Specifically, people spent 44% of their money on food items in 1971, and this dropped by 30% in 2001. Another significant drop was observed in the expenditure on books – 1% in 2001 compared to 6% in 1971. The proportion of spending on petrol and furniture also saw downward trends, albeit by only 1-2% percentage points.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear overview and logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
- Clarify comparisons between time periods.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, but there is room for more variety and precision.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay addresses all parts of the task effectively, providing an overview and detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons for each category.