The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001.
The pie charts show how the spending habits of British people changed from 1971 to 2001, focusing on 6 consumer goods and services.
Overall, the proportion of expenditure on some goods and services – computers, restaurants and cars – increased, others, including bookd, furniture, petrol and food, experienced a downward trend. As a result, food, the largest source of spending initially, was replaced by cars.
In 1971, spendings on cars were at 22%, but this increased during the next 30 years, making up 43% of the total expenditure. Similarly, the share of computers as an expenditure source grew from 2 percentage points in 1971 to 12% in 2001. That year 14% of spendings on restaurants, which was twice as much as that of 1971.
The other areas of expenditure shrank over the years. Specifically, people spent 44% of their money on food items in 1971, and this dropped by 30% in 2001. Another significant drop was observed in the expenditure on books – 1% in 2001 compared to 6% in 1971. The proportion of expenditure on petrol and furniture also saw downward trends, albeit by only 1-2% percentage points.
The essay is logically organized with a clear overview and detailed comparisons. However, minor improvements in the flow between sentences could enhance coherence.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure consistent use of terms (e.g., ‘spendings’ should be ‘spending’).
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, but there are some minor spelling errors.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons of changes in spending habits.