The line graph below shows information about average carbon dioxide emissions per person in 1967 and 2007.
The graph shows information about. the amount of carbon dioxide which was produced in four country between 1967 and 2007.Overall,it can be seen that,there were significant upward trends in amount of carbon emissions in Italy and Portugal.while the reverse was true for The UK and Sweden.Despite decling slightly,the amount of carbon emissions as regard,the amount of carbon emissions in the UK was hit freached a peak.
If we look at Sweden, carbon emissions increased significantly within a decade between 1967 and 1977.It was remaining roughly 10 tonnnes.Then, Sweden decreased until at the end of the duration,about 5,5 tonnes.The UK started with about 11 tonnes,and decreased until the end.approximetly 7 tonnes carbon emissions.
Look at the Italy of the figure, grew between 1967 and 1977.it started with 4 tonnes carbon emissions and this figure number double changed till the end.by comparing, Portugal carbon emissions number was lower than Italy,but both countries figure of directions kind of the same.
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