The line graph below shows information about average carbon dioxide emissions per person in 1967 and 2007.
The line graph gives information about the amount of carbon which was emitted per person in four countries from 1967 to 2007.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that there were upward trends in the amount of carbon emissions both Italy and Portugal, however the reverse was true for The UK and Sweden. Despite declining slightly, the amount of carbon emissions in the UK was dominant compared to other three countries over the whole period.
If we look at Sweden, the amount of carbon emissions increased significantly within a decade between 1967 and 1977. And then it only decreased sharply during 20 years . As regards carbon emissions in Portugal and Italy, they experienced gradually a rise within four decades. Another interesting point is that the trend was similar in two countries like Portugal and Sweden in 2007. Looking at the details, the emissions of carbon dioxide in the UK declined gradually from start to end of the period. Despite decreasing slightly, figure for the UK remained maintained a dominance over the whole period
The essay is generally well-organized, but there are some issues with the logical flow and clarity of ideas.
Suggestions
- Use more cohesive devices to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some expressions are awkward or inaccurate.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task and describes the main trends, but lacks some specific details and clarity.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points to support statements.
- Ensure all main trends are clearly described.