The line graph below shows information about average carbon dioxide emissions per person in 1967 and 2007.
The line graph shows the average production the amount of carbon dioxide emissions of four countries such as UK , Sweden, Italy and Portugal over the period. In general, it can be seen that significant upward in countries like Italy and Portugal , while the reverse was true for the UK and Sweden.
Looking at the details as regard, UK the amount of carbon dioxide production has recorded a decrease , for example , from 1967 to 2007 , it can be seen that reduce from 11 tons to 9 tons . The country of Sweden recorded a fluctuated significantly, as it showed sudden grow in 1967 and a sudden decline the following years . But the UK showed the highest production in 1967 , and also gives information a small decline. Sweden illustrated a production of 5 tons in 2007 after increasing and decreasing indicators.
In contrast, Italy, in 1967, began to produce 4 tons of the carbon dioxide, and these figures reached almost 8 tons by 2007 . Portugal recorded 1 in production at the beginning of 1967, and then year by year the production volume increased to 5 tons . These countries differ from the rest in that they have recorded steady growth. The rarely states will also be able to maintain sustainable growth for 40 years .
The essay provides a basic structure with an introduction and body paragraphs. However, transitions between ideas are not smooth, and some sentences are disjointed.
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- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Avoid repetition of ideas.
The essay uses some relevant vocabulary but lacks variety and precision. There are repetitive phrases and some awkward word choices.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task by describing trends in the graph, but it lacks detailed analysis and contains some inaccuracies.
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- Provide more detailed comparisons between countries.
- Ensure accuracy in reporting data.
- Include specific data points to support statements.