The line graph below shows the oil production and oil consumption in China between 1984 and 2006.
The line graph illustrates the production and consumption of oil in China over the period of 24 years. In general, both consumption and production of oil alike grew notably over the period, while oil consumption outnumbered significantly the other counterpart by the final year.
In detail, regarding the oil production which exhibited slight growth. Started at almost 2 million, the amount of oil produced in China swelled to approximately 3 million in 1986, followed by unchangeable figure by 3.1 million until 1994. Then this figure increase slightly to 3.3 million in the final year.
Additionally, the figure for oil consumed throughout the period increase dramatically Initially, oil consumption accounted for nearly 2 million, well below the production counterpart. Then this figure remained stable by 1990, followed by sudden growth to 3.5 million, outnumbering the production of oil in 1994. Between 1998 and 2006, this consumption increased gradually, making up around 6 millions by the end of the period.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar and punctuation that can cause some difficulty for the reader.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding the use of symbols such as $ and $.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about the data, such as the exact figures for production and consumption in each year.
- Avoid the use of symbols such as $ and $ in your writing. Use the actual numbers instead.