The line graph illustrates how the number of marriages changed over the period, from 1951 to 2001.
THE LINE GRAPH PROVIDES DATA ON HOW THE NUMBER OF THREE TYPES OF MARRIAGES CHANGED OVER THE PERIOD OF 5 DECADES, FROM 1951 TO 2001.
IN GENEREAL, THE FIGURE FOR REMARRIAGES WITNESSED A STABILTY INITIALLY AND A RISE AT THE END, WHEREAS THE REVERSE WAS OBSERVED IN THE NUMBER OF FIRST AND ALL MARRIAGES, ALBEIT AT DIFFERENT DEGREES.
WITH REGARD TO A FIGURE THAT SAW AN INCREASE, THE NUMBER OF REMARRIAGES STOOD AT 150,000 IN 1951, BEFORE LEVELLING OFF FOR THREE DECADES. A FIGURE THAT THEN GREW GRADUALLY TO 200,000, WHICH WAS ITS HIGHEST POINT, WHEN THE PERIOD WAS OVER.
AS FOR THE REMAINING ONES, ALL AND FIRST MARRIAGES, THEIR NUMBERS WERE FAR HIGHER THAN THAT OF REMARRIAGES, AT AROUND 400,000 AND 350,000, RESPECTIVELY. AFTER BOTH CATEGORIES SEEING AN UNCHANGED TREND UNTIL 1961, THE FORMER SAW A GROWTH OF 50,000, WHILE THE NUMBER OF THE LATTER TYPE INCREASED SLIGHTLY TO JUST OVER 350,000 IN 1971. AFTER THAT, THE FIGURES FOR BOTH CATEGORIES STARTED DROPPING TOWARDS THE END, ENDING WITH ABOUT 370,000 AND 250,000.
The essay maintains a logical structure, but some sentences lack clarity and smooth transitions.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the trends for each type of marriage.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some words are repetitive or awkwardly used.
There are several grammatical errors and inconsistencies in capitalization that affect readability.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed explanation and clear trend descriptions.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed analysis of each trend.
- Ensure all key points from the graph are covered.