The line graph illustrates how the rate of the young unemployed changed in five European countries between 2000 and 2012, measured in percentages
The line graph illustrates how the unemployment rate among the young aged 15-24 in five different countries-Italy, Britain, Sweden, France, Germany-changed from 2000 to 2012.
In general, youth unemployment rose substantially year-by-year in Italy, Britain, Sweden, France among the young, whereas the reverse was true for Germany’s youth unemployment rate. Notably, Italy consistently had the highest jobless rate among youngsters over the years, while German young unemployment remained steady in 2000 and in 2012.
Looking at the details, the youth unemployment rate in Italy started at about 27% in 2000 and steadily decreased to approximately 21% in 2006. The trend saw a sharp rise to 36% in 2012 in this trend.The unemployed youth rate in France was at 20% in 2000, before decreasing to 18% after a year. This figure increased to the same level as it was in the first year, after which it experienced a sharp rise, reaching 25% in 2012.Starting at 11%, the rate of unemployed young people in Sweden increased significantly, reaching 21% in the final year.The unemployment rate among young people in Britain was at 10% in 2000. After a increasing marginally until 2008, this trend slowly rose to 24% in 2012.
In contrast, the youth unemployment rate in Germany was at approximately 10% in 2000, after which there was a gradual increase to 15% in 2005. This was followed by a dramatic decline, returning to the same level as in 2000 by 2012.
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