The line graph show clothing exports (1990-2013)
The line graph compares three countries: Colombia, Japan and Myanmar in terms of their clothing exports from 1990 to 2013. Units are measured in millions of dollars.
Overall, in each countries: Myanmar, Japan and Colombia, the exported clothing products experienced both upward and downward trend. Of particular note is textile export in Myanmar, which sharply increased and surpassed other countries by 950 millions of dollars until 2011 and showed a slight decline afterwards.
The figure for these countries: Colombia and Japan, apart from Myanmar, saw a slight improvement. The export of clothing in Colombia peaked at 450 millions of dollars in 1990, followed by a 200 millions of dollars improvement in costs in 2012 and provided a small reduction in the final year. The proportion for the textile exports in Japan declined from about 590 millions of dollars to 520 millions of dollars. The Japan’s closing export declined rather than its proportion in 1990, albeit with some fluctuations.
Furthermore, despite the initial dominance and an upsurge in price, Myanmar declined dramatically until 2013, being the only category that finishing at the smallest figure at 450 millions of dollars. Myanmar, meanwhile, reached the peak and surpassed other figures in between 2000 and 2010. By comparison, each figure changed respectively, showing slight and sharp improvements from the initial value, thereby some of them are retained its position throughout. Moreover, Japan and Colombia demonstrated their amount of price, between 400-600 millions of dollars, in 1990, while third country provided 800 millions of dollars. However, these figures finished differently from their initial costs, Colombia at 610, whereas Myanmar was at 450 and Japan was at 500.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the trends in clothing exports for each country. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data presented in the graph. The essay also makes some comparisons and identifies key trends. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more comparisons between the countries.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including reasons for the trends and comparisons between the countries.
- Make more use of the data presented in the graph to support your analysis and comparisons.