The line graph shows changes in the sales of six important items in WeBuy from January to June in 2020. Overall, there was a considerable increase in the sales of books and movies, cleaning supplies and toiletries, medical supplies and food ad drinks with the last category mentioned dominating the graph for the better part of the period. While electronic products saw their sales decline significantly, the trend was different in clothing – after rising greatly, the sale rate went down its original point. In January the number of Books & movies at 9 thousands, which rose to 45 thousands in June.Similarly, Starting at 35 thousands in January, Food & drinks increased to 60 thousands in June. In January the number of products in Cleaning supplies & toilets at 5 thousands which rose to 50 thousands in June.The same scenario was also observed in Medical supplies at 10 thousands, which increase to 50 thousands. The remaining high categories bucked the foregoing trends. The trends for the remaining categories differed from the others. In contrast, The number of products in Clothing rose at 20 thousands, to 34 thousands in April, but then dropped in June.The number Electronics dropped noticeably from February to June.
The line graph shows changes in the sales of six important items in WeBuy from January to June in 2020.
Overall, there was a considerable increase in the sales of books and movies, cleaning supplies and toiletries, medical supplies and food ad drinks with the last category mentioned dominating the graph for the better part of the period. While electronic products saw their sales decline significantly, the trend was different in clothing – after rising greatly, the sale rate went down its original point.
In January the number of Books & movies at 9 thousands, which rose to 45 thousands in June.Similarly, Starting at 35 thousands in January, Food & drinks increased to 60 thousands in June.
In January the number of products in Cleaning supplies & toilets at 5 thousands which rose to 50 thousands in June.The same scenario was also observed in Medical supplies at 10 thousands, which increase to 50 thousands.
The remaining high categories bucked the foregoing trends.
The trends for the remaining categories differed from the others.
In contrast, The number of products in Clothing rose at 20 thousands, to 34 thousands in April, but then dropped in June.The number Electronics dropped noticeably from February to June.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some issues with word choice and spelling.
The essay makes some use of a variety of grammatical structures and there is some evidence of a range of structures within sentences. However, there are several grammatical errors and some of the sentences are not clear.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be more concise and some of the details could be more clearly presented.
Suggestions
- Try to be more concise in your writing and make sure that all of your details are clearly presented.