The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The line graph illustrates the average count of patients visiting 4 departments of one hospital in a week between 2010 and 2016. Overall, visitors with eye and diabetic issues increased over the period, while trends for birth control and dental patients showed unstable changes.
The figures for eye and diabetic department were 125 and 65 patients respectively in 2010. The number of people visiting eye department slightly rose, reaching 150, after which they skyrocketed to peak at 350 in 2016. Diabetic patients showed a minor increase, reaching 90 in 2012 and remained stable for 2 years. After that, the increase became more noticeable, hitting about 180.
The figures for birth control and dental clinics were at the opposite ends of the spectrum. In 2010, a total of 240 individuals came to the birth control department, while dental patients exhibited 100 patients. The trend for birth control department went upwards to 270 in 2014. However, the count of dental patients dropped to 40 in this year. The gap narrowed down after 2 years, with the figure for birth control decreasing to 175 and those for dental patients rising to 120. From that year on both figures went upwards, reaching 240 and 140 respectively.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
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- Use more varied linking words to connect ideas.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task. However, some word choices could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors that do not impede communication.
The essay effectively addresses the task, describing the main trends and figures in the graph.