The line graph shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of individuals expressing satisfaction with health care system in four countries(Canada, United Kingdom, Netherlands, and United States).
Overall, it is clear that Canada experienced a significant fluctuation whereas other countries changed only slightly, with Netherlands dominating by the end of the year.
Observing the line graph in more details, Canada, it started at approximately 59% satisfaction in 1991. Canada saw a dramatic fall to about 19% by 1998, while this figure increased to 40% by the end of the year.
According to the UK, it started at roughly 24% and experienced minimal growth, increased by around 28% in 2007. When it comes to the Netherlands, this figure started slightly below 48% and remained stable at 47% by the final year. In detail, the United States started at around 10%, and the US saw a slight rise from 10% to about 12%, maintaining the lowest satisfaction levels throughout the years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The information flows well, and there is appropriate use of cohesive devices. However, some parts of the task are slightly underdeveloped.
Suggestions
- Consider providing a more detailed comparison of the countries’ satisfaction levels at the end of the period.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few minor errors.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is accurately selected and effectively compares the satisfaction levels of the four countries.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all parts of the task are equally developed. The comparison of the countries’ satisfaction levels at the end of the period could be more detailed.