The line graph shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of individuals expressing satisfaction with health care system in four countries(Canada, United Kingdom, Netherlands, and United States).
Overall, it is clear that Canada experienced a significant fluctuation whereas other countries changed only slightly, with Netherlands dominating by the end of the year.
Observing the line graph in more details, Canada, it started at approximately 59% satisfaction in 1991. Canada saw a dramatic fall to about 19% by 1998, while this figure increased to 40% by the end of the year.
According to the UK, it started at roughly 24% and experienced minimal growth, increased by around 28% in 2007. When it comes to the Netherlands, this figure started slightly below 48% and remained stable at 47% by the final year. In detail, the United States started at around 10%, and the US saw a slight rise from 10% to about 12%, maintaining the lowest satisfaction levels throughout the years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The information flows well, and there is appropriate use of cohesive devices. However, some parts of the task are slightly underdeveloped.
Suggestions
- Consider providing a more detailed analysis of the data, including comparisons between countries and more precise language to describe the data trends.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing statistical data. However, there is room for improvement in the variety of language used.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures and is generally accurate. However, there are a few minor errors that could be improved.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed analysis of the data. The information is accurately described, and the trends are effectively communicated. However, the task could be enhanced by providing more specific comparisons between the countries.
Suggestions
- Include more specific comparisons and trends for each country to provide a more comprehensive analysis.