The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of multiple ages groups of movie goers in a various country over the 30 years from 1978 to 2008.
Overall, The three age groups increased gradually . Age 14-24 , age 25-34 , age 35-49 were moderately incline and other temporary movements. But age 50+ was sharp decrease in the middle of the period and substantial increase until the end.
First of all, the two groups , age 14-24 and age 35-49 showed similar movement. Age 14-24 was the largest group in the beginning. This rate was 90 %. Both of groups decreased significantly in 1988 , inclined gradually in 1998 and decline slightly over the last period.
Age 25-34 and age 50+ exhibited similar way in the starting of the period. Both of group declined sharply in 1988 and rose sharply in 1998 and the first group decreased opposite to it , the second group increased moderately. After that both of group showed similar rate that is 50 % in the end.
The essay has a logical flow of information and ideas are arranged in a coherent manner. However, there are some unclear statements which disrupt the overall coherence.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that all supporting details relate to this idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary but there are some inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices.
The essay contains several grammatical errors which affect the overall clarity and readability of the text.
The essay provides an adequate response to the task. However, the description of the data is somewhat disorganized and could be structured better for easier understanding.
Suggestions
- Try to organize the information in a more logical manner. Start by describing the overall trends and then move on to the details for each age group.