The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The change chart gives information about the percentages of Australian exports with four countries: Japan, US, China, India within 1990 and 2012. Overall, China illustrated high figure than other categories. Furthermore, first of all, exports in Japan showed high fugure, but it declined sharply later. Exports in US and India accounted for fluctuate.
Exports in China showed high fugure between 2005 and 2012. First of all, it showed much less decline in 1995. Exports in Japan showed change sharply, because, it showed sharp decline initially, which accounted for 26%. However, in 2012, exports declined noticeably, which accounted for 16%.
Export in US and India showed fluctuate figure, especially, Us. In 1990 and 2000, it showed drop sharply in 2010, which connected for 2010%. Exports in India illustrated the same figure between 1990 and 2000, with 0,4%, however it increased highly between 2000 and 2010, which accounted for 8%.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical flow. Transitions between ideas are abrupt, and the sequence of information is confusing.
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- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
- Provide an introduction and conclusion.
The essay uses limited vocabulary and lacks variety in word choice. Some words are used incorrectly.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms, punctuation, and sentence fragments.
The essay attempts to address the task but lacks detailed information and accurate comparisons. Some data is misrepresented or unclear.
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- Include more detailed comparisons between countries.
- Ensure data is accurately represented.
- Summarize the main trends clearly.