The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the percentages of Australian exports with four countries, namely Japan, US, China, and India, between 1990 and 2012. Overall, while the percentage of exports with China grew during the period, the reverse was true for Japan. US and India, on the other hand, showed no significant changes throughout the years.
Starting at 4% in 1990, the percentage of Australia’s sell overseas increased slightly to 5% by 2000, the figure that then experienced a double in 2005. The figures climbed substantially by 2010, reaching 25%, and then stopped at 27% in 2012. That of Japan declined considerably to 20% by 1995, after the introduction of one fifth in 1990. A negligible drop of 18% was observed in 2000, the figure that then remained unchange for the following five years, and stopped at 16% in 2012.
US and India, however, represented no considerable figures. After starting at 11% in 1990, the percentage of exports with US fluctuated wildly, and stopped at 5% in 2012. That of India beginned at 4%, the figure that then witnessed a gradual improve of 7% in 2010, before a drop of 5% in 2012.
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear linking devices between some ideas.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Summarize key trends more clearly.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some inappropriate word choices.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies in data reporting.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between countries.
- Ensure accuracy in data reporting.
- Highlight key trends and changes more effectively.