The line graph shows the proportion of total exports of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.
The line graph shows the shares of clothes that sold abroad in four different countries from 2000 to 2014. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall, the EU, Asia (without China), and the USA’s total exports decreased, except for China’s. It is clear that the USA showed the lowest trend over given periods.
In 2000, the proportion of the USA and China was less than other competitors, approximately at 11 and 14, respectively. A dramatic increase was observed in China in 2002, while the USA remained at its initial.The gap between the USA and China shrank throughout the remaining years. In the final year, having soared up remarkably, China reached its apex at nearly 37, while the reverse was true for the USA.
In the beginning of the period, the number for Asia (30) was near that of the EU (33). In 2002, the indication of Asia went down noticeably at around 18.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence construction.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes some relevant comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and by making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the information presented in the graph.
- Make more specific comparisons and try to explain the reasons for the trends shown in the graph.