The line graph shows the proportion of total exports of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.
The line graph compares 4 different parts of the world based on what percentage of clothing they exported in total over 14 years, starting from 2000.
Overall, there were varying degrees of decline in the proportion of the exportation of clothing items in the USS and European Union, while China, in this regard, increased sharply, overtaking other regions over the period given.
In 2000, European Union had by far the highest portion of clothes exported which accounted for a third, and it was closely followed by that of Asia (without China) with 30%. The figure for China, however, stood at half percent of Asia, whereas around 10% of clothing was exported by the USA which was the lowest exportation rate recorded in that year.
By 2014, the proportion of clothing items in Asia (China was excluded) had shown a gradual rise to 20% despite dropping sharply by roughly 13% in 2002. By contrast, China had become a leading country in its export of clothes, reaching a peak of over 35%. That of the USA, in this respect, experienced a moderate decline to about 5%, and by far the biggest decrease of 10% had been observed in the percentage od clothing exported in European Union
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