The line graph shows the proportion of total exports of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.
The line graph gives information about the percentage of whole exports of clothing in China, European Union, Asia and USA from 2000 to 2014. Overall,the most popular country was China in exporting clothes. Also China and other Asian countries increased while others dropped.
The country of China started around 14 % while the percentage of Asia was about 30%. The level of China increased gradually till the 2014 , to approximately 36% and took the lead while the percentage of Asia decreased dramatically around 18%. Then it grew steadily to about 20% in end of the term.
In 2000 the figure of European Union toped the chart , at about 32% while USA was about 11%. The figure of European Union was narrow down ,at 23% in 2010. At the end of the term it was approximately 21% while the level of USA saw little fluctuation between 2008 to 2010 around 7 to 9%. After that it continued going down to 6% in 2014.
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