The line graph shows the proportion of total exports of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.
The graph illustrates data about the percentage of clothing which exports in 4 countries over 14 years between 2000 and 2014. Overall, there are appears to be two opposing trends displayed on the line graphs. Of particular note was China which exhibited an upward trend.
When looking at China, we can see that the line graph was dominated from 2012 to 2014 with 35 %, despite ranked third by 2008, experiencing a dramatic growth.
The other European Union, Asia(without China) and USA showed similar flat trends throughout the period. Inspite of having the greatest proportion of total exports of clothing, European Union underwent a considerable decrease. As for Asia(without China), it witnessed a substantial decline, followed by a slow rise. And also, USA which made up 11% total exports of clothing at the start of the period, before decreasing double (6%) its initial level
The essay presents information in a somewhat logical order, but there are issues with clarity and flow. Transitions between ideas are abrupt, and some details are unclear or misplaced.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between points.
- Ensure all data mentioned corresponds accurately to the graph.
- Provide a more structured overview.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors. Some word choices are inappropriate or unclear.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures. There is limited use of complex sentences.
The essay partially addresses the task. It describes some trends but lacks clear and accurate details for all countries.
Suggestions
- Include specific data points for all countries.
- Ensure accurate representation of trends and changes.
- Provide a clearer summary of overall trends.