The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999
The line chart provides information about thefts per thousand automobiles in four major countries, namely, Great Britain, Sweden, France, and Canada from 1990 to 1999. Overall, the crime cases in Great Britain and Sweden dominated of rating over the given period, while two other countries France and Canada remained the lowest ones. However, there can be observed three slight declines (in Great Britain, France, Canada) and only one significant growth (Sweden) in the chart.
Great Britain dominated the rating with average 18% in 1990, went through an erratic period from 1992 to 1996 and sharply declined to 16 % at the end of decade. France and Canada were just above 5%, at about 6% and 7% respectively at the beginning of the given period, nevertheless, France significantly rose, as well, experienced a period of volatility from 1991 to 1995, and returned the same point in 1999. Whereas, Canada plunged to 5% in 1993 and maintained the same level as France. Sweden in spite of other countries faced tremendous changes in car robbery, starting at 8% at first, reaching 14% after 10 years.
The essay is organized logically, but transitions between ideas could be smoother. Some sentences are complex and require clearer connections.
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- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Avoid abrupt transitions.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some words are repetitive or inaccurately used.
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but contains some errors that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task and describes the main trends, but lacks some details and precision.
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- Include more specific data points to support descriptions.
- Ensure all trends are clearly explained.