The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The image illustrates the revolution of the countryside in Ryemouth from 1995 until now.
Overall, it is clear that, the forest park and fishing port removed completily and fish market eliminated instead some apartments have beed build.
Looking at the picture, in 1995, there were big forest park which was consist of trees and Farmland in the north-eastern site.In southern part, there was see and in the middle of it was fishing part. In addition, there was fishing market in front of shop that next to the road. When it comes to housing, took place the both sides of the road in north- western part.
In contrast, Nowadays the forest park has been eliminated and farmland has witnessed alteration with golf and tennis courts at the bottom. The fishing port and fish market has been demolished instead, apartments has been designed. Interestingly, hotel and cafe have preserved ,have not seen any changes untill now . However, car par added close to the hotel in southern part. Moreover, shop replaced with restaurant and cross-section road has been build while single-family housed demolished in western side.
The essay attempts to describe the changes in Ryemouth, but lacks clear organization and logical flow. Some sentences are disjointed and transitions between ideas are weak.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each idea is fully developed before moving to the next.
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. There are some inappropriate word choices and spelling errors.
Frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing hinder comprehension. Limited use of complex structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and clarity in describing the changes. Some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about changes.
- Ensure accuracy in describing map elements.