The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The maps illustrates the development which took place in the countryside of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
Overall, a comparison of the two maps shows a village has been transformed into urban city. The most noticeable changes include farmland and the forest park has been replaced to golf and tennis area, while fishing part was demolished and converted into sea.
In 1995, the northwest part of the area was replaced by farmland and a forest park and these have been transformed into golf and tennis areas. Fishing port has been demolished to the area. Additionally, Housing in the northeast has been expanded, with new buildings added to the residential area.
Nowadays, the fish market and fishing port have been removed. In their place, apartments have been builded. Additionally, a restaurant has been added to the road. However the cafe near the sea has been saw unchanged.
The essay presents information in a generally coherent manner but lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different aspects of the map changes.
- Ensure logical flow from one idea to the next.
- Use linking words to connect ideas and sentences.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some errors in word choice.
The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity and comprehension.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed description and analysis of the changes shown in the maps.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes in the village.
- Ensure all key features are mentioned and described.
- Provide a clearer overview of the transformation.