The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The map below demonstrates the improvement of the rural area of Ryemouth over the 3 decades.
Overall, farmland and the forest park were replaced by a golf course and tennis courts. Shops and the fish market were also replaced with restaurants and apartments, while the fishing port was completely removed.
In the southeast, the hotel and cafe stayed the same in 1995 as well as now, but a car park was added next to the hotel. In the northwest, most houses remained unchanged, in both maps. However, the fishing port was completely removed.
In the northeastern part of the map, the farmland and forest park were transformed into a golf course and tennis courts, creating connected recreational spaces. Moreover, the shops and fish market in the central area were replaced by restaurants and apartments, contributing to the modernization of the town’s amenities.
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Transitions between ideas are generally smooth, but there could be more explicit linking phrases.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Consider summarizing key changes at the end.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, with some use of less common lexical items. There is occasional repetition.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with few errors. Sentence structures are varied and mostly accurate.
The essay addresses all parts of the task, describing the main changes accurately and clearly. It could benefit from a more detailed conclusion.
Suggestions
- Summarize the key changes in a concluding sentence.