The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The two maps illustrate how the village of Ryemouth has developed over a period 30 years.
In general, it is clear that, Ryemouth has seen major significant changes with natural areas like farmland and the forest park being replaced by new facilities, while the fishing industry has been removed to way for housing and modern services.
In 1995, the northeastern part of the village was farmland and forest park was located just south it. By the present, the farmland has replaced by a golf course, while tennis court has been constructed on the site of the forest park. Housing in the northwest has expanded with additional houses built.
Along the southern side, the fish market has been replaced by apartments and fishing port has been removed. Shops near the hotel have been changed into restaurant and car park has been added next to the hotel. Additionally, the cafe along the coastline has remained unchanged.
The essay presents a clear overview of the changes in Ryemouth, with logical sequencing. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more cohesive devices to link ideas.
- Ensure all parts of the description are well-connected.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, though some phrases could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are several errors affecting clarity.
The essay adequately describes the changes shown in the map, covering all the main features and making comparisons where relevant.