The maps below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site
The map presents data about plans for how the old industrial site will change into a new housing area.
Overall, it is evident that the present industrial site was constructed for the purpose of business activities, and it is planning to reconstruct for local residents.
Looking at the current structure of the building, the north side of the building is covered by the entrance and reception area. Apart from that, there is a factory in the corner of the east, while the parking area is located in the west. Additionally, there are also six offices with their own cafeteria situated in the south just next to the storage facility.
Starting with the development plan, the old factory will be expanded for building an apartment with its own parking lot along the pie walk, while the opposite of the area will be covered with 3- and 4-bedroom houses. Similarly, a communal garden with two big ornamental trees will be built in the center of the area, making it the perfect spot for socializing. 3 houses with 2 bedrooms will be established in the north while the parking garage will be planned in the south, with access through a private road.
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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the changes. However, the use of some cohesive devices could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to make the progression of ideas smoother.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The essay also makes some comparisons where relevant. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding ambiguity in some parts.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about the changes, such as the size and layout of the new buildings.
- Avoid ambiguity in the use of terms such as ‘pie walk’ and ‘storage facility’.