The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates todays and the future facilities scheduled in the Norbiton’s industrial area. Overall, There are some urbanization improvements that are planned to replace the factories such as houses, flats and several types of service.
Today, factories that are on the street located in the center of this map are mostly in use, so no other constructions are built. Whereas, the river and farmland are norther than the factory sector, the main road is on the south and the town on the West site. In fact, The location of these figures is not going to be changed
However, in the future the factory site is going to be restored into the housing area. Moreover, the bridge is going to be constructed, so it will connect the farmland and the main area. On the left turn from the main road there are shop and medical center planned to built, while on the East and North-East site of the street there are school and playground.
The essay has a basic structure, but there are issues with logical flow and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing for different points.
- Improve the logical flow between sentences.
- Ensure all comparisons are clear and relevant.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
There are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay covers the main features but lacks detailed comparisons and clarity in some areas.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the current and future maps.
- Ensure all main features are clearly described.
- Clarify the changes for better understanding.