The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton,and planned future debelopment of the site.
The two Maps shows in industrial area in the town of Norbiton such as a planet future growth of location Overall: currently Norbiton industrial place are adopt farming there are many factories and center of the Norbiton there is a roundabout also River uses farming are also using for different purposes many factories modify houses in the future plan are in the future to build shops Medical Center and playground school and Bridge.
At the present time ,in the middle of the area there is roundabout,which is covered by three factories,there is a road on the east side of the roundabout and there are numarious factories on this road.There is a long river.which is located in the top as well as behind the river there is a farmland.In the west side there is a town,where is restricted.Also there is a road located at the bottom of the area,which is connected with round about.
In the future Norbiton is planned to be urbanized and all the factories will be removed such replaced by houses and other buildings.In the middle of the roundabout has not changed and it is planned to build another timy roundabout below the main roundabout as well as to build medical center next to the tiny roundabout,to build a school at the end of the road on the right side of the area and a children’s playground is planned to be built between the road and the river,a road will be built on the left side of the main roundabout and houses will be built on its sides,connected to the main roundabout where the bridge is planned to be built and an apartment is to be built on the back side of the bridge.
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